Throughout a Pokemon trainer's journey, defeat and losses are inevitable. Cases of loss create opportunities for a trainer to analyze their past strategies and make necessary revisions so that they strengthen their chances of victory the next battle. It is crucial for a trainer to pick themselves up, and go make changes to their battle strategy so that they're constantly improving. 

Outcome 4 is about a writer's ability to implement different strategies of editing and revising in order to further strengthen their argument in a paper. Just like a Pokemon trainer, when one strategy fails it is important as a writer to be able to go back to the drawing board, and derive another strategy that might be more effective. 

Writer's Memo: 

Outcome 4 highlighted the importance of revisions in writing, through the use of a diverse range of strategies. Throughout the writing process of Major Paper 2, I made many revisions. Specifically implementing strategies of elaboration, clarification and reorganization in order to further strengthen my claim. Because was a compilation of Short Assignment 2, 3, and 4, I had bits and pieces already thought out. My claim had progressed since Short Assignment 2. Rather than just claiming that accidental is an issue we must be made more aware of, I now claimed that accidental racism exists and has negative effects on victims. Taking this new claim alongside my five sources, I had to make much more revisions compared to previous assignments and therefore, it is a perfect fit for Outcome 4.

This paper required successful incorporation of numerous sources. In order to make my claim persuasive and clear, the sources I needed to have a sense of flow and connection. In the first draft of Major Paper 2 I struggled tremendously with framing my usage of evidence. For example, in the hook of my paper I originally started off by saying, “Where are you really from?” “What kind of Asian are you?” “Do you speak Asian?” Which didn’t provide much background information on where these pieces of dialogue came from. In the final draft, I decided to frame these quotes differently, and give more context through the use of a personal anecdote. By explaining that these quotes were said to me at “a friend’s holiday party” and explaining that “I felt an immediate sense of alienation and insecurity” when these quotes were said, give readers more context to why the issue of accidental racism is relevant to my life. Secondly, in the first draft I failed to fully clarify and define specific aspects from Accidental Racism that helped show why this video is a good fit for explaining the real effects from accidental racism. In my final draft, pointed out that Wong Fu Production specifically use “dialogue, shot types, and setting”. In my first draft, I found myself rambling and ranting as to why I thought this video helped proved my claim. Understanding that there was a more effective way, I made sure to fully elaborate and connect the points I found within the video back to my claim which is accidental racism is a prevalent issue that imposes negative effects on victims. For example, by elaborating that Wong Fu Productions “intentionally” set the “short in a typical office building to bring to our attention that accidental racism” appears in places we wouldn’t normally expect. Additionally, we are able to see victims feel “alienated, insecure and offended” through the producers use of shot types. By revising my paper so that I had source and opinion that talk about my claim instead of rants from myself, is much more persuasive and effective. Finally, through the revision process I decided to completely remove the article, Accidental Courtesy, which talked about an African American man befriending members of the KKK. In my final draft, I removed this piece because it seemed out of place, and in a way contradicted my idea of accidental racism because the KKK is a clan that is associated with clear acts of racism. Instead, I researched for a new source and found Isabelle Kkoo’s article, 4 Reasons Asking “Where Are You From?” Is Offensive, which discusses her reasons for believing why remarks of accidental racism are “incorrectly phrased and inappropriate”. This article strengthened my work because it serves as a smooth transition from remarks observed in the comedy short, Accidental Racism, to remarks observed in real life.

All in all, Outcome 4 significantly improved my skills as a writer and taught me the importance of revisions. Major Paper 2 taught me to change the order of my paragraphs, better elaborate and connect my evidence and sometimes even removing an entire source from my essay can strengthen my argument from before. This idea of revision can be applied to any kind of work I do. For example, during homework assignments I will always take the opportunity to revise because you’re almost certain to catch a mistake. Also whenever I’m attempting a challenging task such as learning an instrument. Through revision of the strategies I use when learning an instrument can alter the efficiency and overall increase productivity.